Ayumi Hamasaki Sekai - View Single Post - [romaji and translation] untitled ~for her~
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Old 31st December 2007, 12:34 AM
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Originally Posted by masa View Post
Do you mean "We separated our hands" or "We parted our hands"? Or do you suggest some other way of writing?
Unlinked is kinda mechanical sounding imo..

Perhaps "We let go of each other's hands and walked" instead?

It's much easier to understand, and it doesn't sound like their hands are smashed together. [Then again, I dunno... linked is more poetic.]
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