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Originally Posted by v3lun420
U should see his translation. He is a dedicated Ayu Fans, As for translation, I believe his translation more than anyone else. Plus ur translation sounds like it uses a lot of unnecessary words
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masa's translation feels more natural, I think, than that other one.
yeah, it doesnt need to have word "light" in it because hikarikagayaite is taken in literally to mean "really shining."
maybe instead of "in cold air," masa君〜 you should put "with a cold air."
or something like that.. "with dignity," "with solitude"
that kind of cold, lonely feelings.
I really like he didnt put "heart" into the second verse, cause kokoro doesnt just mean heart, but mind, soul, etc. So its literal the way one thinks to walk I think..
Yeah masa did so good job... english is so good. _ _);
and in my mind, the other one did not include a vital part of the last last last section.
I want him to see my smile
More natural than now
However maybe natural should be "innocent" or so.
uuaa.. I don't know!