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Originally Posted by tenshi no hane
You were smiling sweetly
Where did you disappear to?
You led me by the hand
That warmth still remains
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I don't really like how those lines feel disconnected. Specially the first one.
Quote:
The gently smiling you
Where did it disappear to?
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Maybe change it to something like this?
冷たい目で should be "with cold eyes".
Thanks for the translation. ^^