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Old 12th May 2016, 07:38 PM
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Originally Posted by tenshi no hane View Post
You were smiling sweetly
Where did you disappear to?

You led me by the hand
That warmth still remains
I don't really like how those lines feel disconnected. Specially the first one.

Quote:
The gently smiling you
Where did it disappear to?
Maybe change it to something like this?

冷たい目で should be "with cold eyes".

Thanks for the translation. ^^
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