[romaji and translation] GREEN

[RubySakura13]

Thank you for translating this Masa!

I really love the lyrics to Green, it's beautiful.

[Kazeyomi]

this is the real and complete lyrics? *_* thanks!!

[SunshineSlayer]

Originally Posted by ImpactBreaker

If you look at the whole sentence, keeping will not look right. It has to make sense with this:

"Just like me who is afraid of the warmth
And keep myself away from anything leading to hope"


I'm not sure which would be right though: keep or keeps, though I have a feeling "keeps" would look a bit awkward.

It's a tough call, but if you use "keeps", I would write it like this:

"Just like me who is afraid of the warmth
And keeps themselves away from anything leading to hope"

Originally Posted by chocopockymaster

That was sarcasm. Let me put it in plain English: Your snappy comments, not just here, but in every other thread where you think you are the person with the ultimately correct opinion on the subject, are not appreciated.

In general I haven't had a problem with Melrose's posts at all, at least from what I have read (I don't really read every thread), but that one just kind of threw me because my post really didn't have anything negative directed at Melrose at all.

[crea_spain]

Thank you very much for the beautiful translation masa.

Ayu is a poet, beautiful & sweet lyrics ^^

[4ever*ayu]

i've been waiting for this, thx masa!
but honestly, i don't expect it to be this fast considering the single is not release officially

[apple-pi]

ooo, thanks a lot for the translation!
I'd been looking forward to see this song's lyrics!

[Coelacanth]

I love the lyrics. Greatly appreciated masa!

[kuri♥ayu]

Originally Posted by ImpactBreaker

If you look at the whole sentence, keeping will not look right. It has to make sense with this:

"Just like me who is afraid of the warmth
And keep myself away from anything leading to hope"


I'm not sure which would be right though: keep or keeps, though I have a feeling "keeps" would look a bit awkward.

"keep" would be the correct way i'm pretty sure. because she's talking about herself so it would be like

"i keep myself away..." not "i keeps myself away..."

[syntherella]

Ni hao, masa, and many thanks for another fantastic translation! I always look forward to your posts; they make me appreciate Ayu's songs even more!

Also, regarding your question:

Originally Posted by masa

To: SunshineSlayer

Thanks for your answer.
But if so, should I also change the word "keep" in the next line to "keeps"?
-And keep myself away from anything leading to hope

I agree, 'keeps' would be more fitting. Since 'me' is singular, the verbs following 'me who' should be singular, too, hence 'is' and 'keeps'.

I further suggest 'keeps herself', since the subject is most likely female and uses 'me' to talk about herself (or himself) in the third person. I hope I helped!

[erin1m]

Keeping is still grammatically correct. It really doesn't make a difference--they're both correct and mean the same thing. In regular sentence structure, it looks like this:

"Just like me, who is afraid of the warmth, keeping myself away from anything leading to hope."

"Just like me, who is afraid of the warmth, and keep myself away from anything leading to hope."

It's just a matter of personal preference. I prefer the first one because it's slightly more concise, but some people probably find the second one clearer.

[masa]

Thanks for your suggestions.
I change several parts again.

And keep myself --> Keeping myself
The smiling face of that man --> The smiling face of that person
I'm staring at my dear --> I'm staring at my dear person

[rusuke]

Great lyrics!! Thanks for the translation, masa!!!
While I was reading the lyrics, Shuya gets in my mind!! I dunno, why? hmMMmpp

[Lanz16]

Very beautiful lyrics!
Its like autumn song.

Thanks for the translations!!!

[v3lun420]

Originally Posted by Melrose

Already posted here: (and a better translation imo)

http://www.ahsforum.com/forum/showthread.php?t=82560



E.g. your translation of the first verse doesn't have the word 'light' in it.

U should see his translation. He is a dedicated Ayu Fans, As for translation, I believe his translation more than anyone else. Plus ur translation sounds like it uses a lot of unnecessary words

[ayupan90]

aw its so pretty, thanku ^_^ btw I agree with erin1m, "Just like me, who is afraid of the warmth, keeping myself away from anything leading to hope." does sound better

[maikaru]

Originally Posted by v3lun420

U should see his translation. He is a dedicated Ayu Fans, As for translation, I believe his translation more than anyone else. Plus ur translation sounds like it uses a lot of unnecessary words

masa's translation feels more natural, I think, than that other one.

yeah, it doesnt need to have word "light" in it because hikarikagayaite is taken in literally to mean "really shining."

maybe instead of "in cold air," masa君〜 you should put "with a cold air."
or something like that.. "with dignity," "with solitude"
that kind of cold, lonely feelings.

I really like he didnt put "heart" into the second verse, cause kokoro doesnt just mean heart, but mind, soul, etc. So its literal the way one thinks to walk I think..

Yeah masa did so good job... english is so good. _ _);

and in my mind, the other one did not include a vital part of the last last last section.
I want him to see my smile
More natural than now

However maybe natural should be "innocent" or so.

uuaa.. I don't know!

[extepan]

thanks for the translation!

[ImpactBreaker]

Originally Posted by erin1m

Keeping is still grammatically correct. It really doesn't make a difference--they're both correct and mean the same thing. In regular sentence structure, it looks like this:

"Just like me, who is afraid of the warmth, keeping myself away from anything leading to hope."

"Just like me, who is afraid of the warmth, and keep myself away from anything leading to hope."

Oh, that's true. I can see it now. Thanks for pointing it out.

About the comparisons, can you guys just stop it? We should be grateful to everyone who attempted doing a translation. We should be able to read, appreciate and be thankful for them. At least for us who know absolutely nothing or very little of japanese, which I believe is the majority here.

[AyUmIXx]

yea pls stop the comparison..
we never know exactly what's Ayu trying to say on her lyric... unless you're Japanese...
so thanks to Masa who has give his 100% effort in translation for us which is already great! i love Masa's translation

[tokage-chan]

Banzai! GREEN lyricsXD Arigatou^_^