Has anyone ever tried to write their own lyrics?

[tl1029530921]

Heres mine....please leave yours too!

Illusion

Throughout my life,
people entered, and people left.
But i never thought
that it would hurt as much as it did.

At times i felt alone,
like i was the only one in this world.
But you understood my pains.
We stood side-by-side,
hand-in-hand.
That was all i needed.

I spilled my life to you,
but you left violently with a lie
that had me fooled.
But it's funny how just one lie
can scar you for the rest of your life.

My life turned hollow,
and i felt like you took my life away with you
as if all i feelings were gone.
I began to lie to myself,
but after time, all these lies hast left my hear stone cold and shallow
I was afraid
to reveal the real me to anyone else.

you entered my life and left.
But i bet you didn't think
that you leaving had an impact on me like a cold winter storm.

You entered my life and left.
But i didn't know that it would hurt
as much as it did.

Love comes and goes
almost as if it were an illusion.


any criticism is appreciated


now....im gonna try to write music for it...somehow...maybe i can get a CD company to listen to dis

[narusegawa]

woah!! ur good at dis. u should do dis as a career.
i can never write lyrics....but i'll try tomorrow ^ ^

[tl1029530921]

wow....tank you ...any contributions???i wanna read too!

[narusegawa]

ok..here's one i jus wrote...pleeeez dont laugh at it.


So when i dream,
i fall right in the sea,
i really wanna wake up but it never happens,
falling into deep sleep....
sails me through oceans of coral blue and red.
i cant stop dreaming..

chorus-
in the dreamland...
i can never leave,
but its never really a nightmare,
so when i sleep,
be by my side tonight,
maybe i can stop....dreaming...

When night comes,
i know wats gonna come,
i light the candles of tranquility,
and hope to stay awake,
but the angels of dream have come again...
and i drift to peaceful sleep.

chorus

ahhhhh....it sucks....

[tl1029530921]

!?!?!!?it doesnt suck!!!!!by being able to write your already talented than most ppl....(such as me 2 years ago)

[ayumi_pukka89]

aaahhh sugoi! ^^ its very good

I love writing lyrics or poems or whatever.... ^^
Im not sure If Im a good writer but I write anywayz
......I recently wrote a song....[tho, I dun think u'd wanna read it......it kinda of 'interesting'.....^^;;;;]

[tl1029530921]

i wanna read ...i can write but cant rhyme.....and trying to write that into a song will be a tough job...but i'll try!!....for some reason i think its easier to write about dark stuff....ionno why.

[ayumi_pukka89]

I agree w/ u about writing dark lyrics.....I just dun like happy lyrics.....w/ dark lyrics people have to think more about what ur writing....well.....at least in my opinion

--oh and.....im not sure u'd wanna read em....[I wouldnt be able to post em here.......If u know what I mean ^^]

well.........here's something else I wrote....
I dun know If it would make any sense to u.... ^^;;
Its kinda of random ^^
I wrote it a long time ago......

Pleases me, heaven.

I see. There I am… the love in you.
Only you know of it.

That blue green heaven back when I was a girl...
What happened?
God only knows

Shattered dreams
Scattered amoung the half living souls
God only knows

But really does he?
Does he even exist?

Even if he doesn’t
My shoulders rest upon my dreams

That heavenly will I keep
to move on
Gods only knows

Spirits roam this world,
Our world,
We call,
Earth?

Loquacious, vulgar shrewds
They’re not so clever anymore
Are they?

Do people venerate god?
One simple answer

Yes.

Laugh in spite our dreams
Death to us has no more meaning
For
We are dead ourselves…

[tl1029530921]

dat ones good too...powerfulO.o
i mean...u shouldn't write about stuff TOO dark.well...u can...just not publicise it...(is dat even a word)..
im gonna try to write another one....somethings inspiring me ionno wut