[romaji & translation] Don't look back

[oji-i-san]

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Originally Posted by appears

1 so, in this case, you can use ”side” to display characteristics... and if you are not satisfied with 'unattractive' i would suggest 'ugly', which not only refers to physical but also mental traits, i.e 'it's my ugly side, which i hold so dear to me' etc...

3 this does not sound like natural english... firstly because of the previous sentence, this one must also be in the conditional tense, but furthermore i don't think it's best to directly translate this, rather to colloquialise into -nothing would excite me [enough]- as excite also conveys the process stimulation...



1 it's true, but いくらか can also have the meaning of やや, no? which is -a little / some-... somewhat sounds quite literary to me

3 i checked your link, but it didn't come up with carry a torch... in japanese it's differentですよ…
口語～　（…に）《片思ひの》恋をする[して悩む]；（…のために）忠誠を尽くす, 運動をする
is -to carry a torch-... one translation of [mune wo kogasu] means to be consumed by something, in the context of this song, "stimulation" / excitement...

I'm happy that we can discuss like this.

1. How does "It is embarrassing things that I feel dear" sound?


2. It's true that "いくらか" is very similar to "やや". Well, now I feel "If I stay here, it may be easy a little" sounds ok/fine though I still feel slight difference of nuance from the original lyrics.

Now I think we have these candidates:

"If I stay here, it may be easy a little"
"If I stay here, it may be easier"
"If I stay here, it may be some easy" <= Is this natural???
"If I stay here, it may be somewhat easy" <= I prefer this, especially if the original lyrics is "幾らか", not "いくらか"

My image of "幾らか/いくらか" is "to some extent, but not sure about how much".


3. The point is that "胸を焦がす" is a kind of fixed expression for feeling of love and longing. "Carry a torch for" is also a phrasal expression and I thought it has a meaning near to that of "胸を焦がす", doesn't it???

If you want to use "consumed with", I think it would be like
"but there'll be no exciting things (or stimulus) I'm consumed with". But I think the word images of "consume" and "焦がす" are too different.

If we say "but there'll be nothing which excites me", it's correct and natural, but I'm afraid we'll lose a poetic impression of ayu's original lyrics.

My image of "胸を焦がす" is "my heart is secretly on fire for love/longing".

ok, mine is here and I'm waiting for any comments again

[masa]

Originally Posted by oji-i-san

My image of "胸を焦がす" is "my heart is secretly on fire for love/longing".

I know that usually this phrase "mune o kogasu" is used for the feeling of love. But it isn't in this song. She is using this with broader meaning. That's why I chose the word, "enthusiastic".

[oji-i-san]

Originally Posted by masa

I know that usually this phrase "mune o kogasu" is used for the feeling of love. But it isn't in this song. She is using this with broader meaning. That's why I chose the word, "enthusiastic".

haha, I know your point.
I'm talking about original image of that phrase. I feel it's interesting ayu combined this phrase with "刺激 / shigeki" (and this combination isn't very strange because the feeling of longing has a broader meaning than love). I'm trying to think how I can convey this impression. Maybe we can have some candidates and leave them to readers.


EDIT: If we want to use enthusiastic, how about these?
"but there'll be no stimulus which makes me enthusiastic"
"but there'll be no stimulus I'm (or can be) enthusiastic for"
(I know these two convey different meanings and both of them are less-colloquial, though ...)

[appears]

Originally Posted by oji-i-san

haha, I know your point.
I'm talking about original image of that phrase. I feel it's interesting ayu combined this phrase with "刺激 / shigeki" (and this combination isn't very strange because the feeling of longing has a broader meaning than love). I'm trying to think how I can convey this impression. Maybe we can have some candidates and leave them to readers.


EDIT: If we want to use enthusiastic, how about these?
"but there'll be no stimulus which makes me enthusiastic"
"but there'll be no stimulus I'm (or can be) enthusiastic for"
(I know these two convey different meanings and both of them are less-colloquial, though ...)

i agree that it would be good to keep her original poetry as much as we can...
regarding the 幾等か question, i find 'slightly' is a better translation than 'somewhat', what do you think?

i found an interesting translation of 刺激の無き事 - lack of inspiration.
so if we substitute stimulus for inspiration, we can put "staying here might be slightly easier, but nothing would consume me with what i need to be inspired"